The sun was beating down on my face, making everyone around me feel tired and sticky with sweat. My dad was inflating the little rubber pool while we waited and played in the soft grass. Jennifer and Kimberly were mumbling over the sound of the pump filling the pool with air; my sisters never wasted the opportunity to make a game out of anything. Of course, I was watching over them in the shade making sure they didn't get into any trouble and honestly, was too tired to join them anyway. Luckily, my dad finished inflating the baby pool and that's when my cousins arrived, shouting greetings and running towards us. Immediately, Jenny ran up to them and hugged each cousin, regardless of how hot and sweaty she was. Soon Kim followed and there was a little crowd forming when I went over to say, "hi." Meanwhile, my dad was getting the hose from out of the basement and turned it on. Thankfully, the rushing, icy water splashed in the baby pool, and I stood next to it hoping some of the tiny droplets would cool me down. My dad put the hose in the pool and let the water blast out. Carefully, I attempted to dip my foot in the water without getting the cold water infected with bits of grass and stuff on my foot. After a while my cousins got in the pool when it was all filled up and we had a great time. For some reason when I'm asked to think about a childhood memory, this was the only one I could remember. I guess I was really happy.
Your details are on point but I think you need to focus a bit more before you move on
ReplyDelete'Kay, thanks for telling me, Mel.
Delete^^^ your dets are on point, I think this kinf of reminds me of The Stranger because you just seem to be observing from a distance what everybody is doing, until the end. and also the way you don't specify how you were feeling and how the different things going on made you feel, your just kind of describing whats going on, i like that
ReplyDeleteThanks Alisha. I guess I tend to observe what's going o around me without knowing.
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